I usually don’t like to judge other’s writing so harshly but some of these scene’s really missed the mark. There’s artistic license and then there is a complete lack of –well– just giving a f**k. I’m sure this is what people mean by really trimming the fat in writing. For most of the scenes, if they weren’t a necessary part of the plot, I would have hacked them quick.
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